Please Edited my English essay?

Please be careful when using the answers you get here. I noticed many errors in grammar, word choice, and punctuation in one of the answers you were given, where your paragraphs were rewritten. You are better off just handing in what you have or, if you can, have your teacher look it over before you turn it in for a final grade. Sometimes the people who answer these questions are not any wiser than yourself in certain areas, and are not good editors, so please, be careful.